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First Rewrite/Second Draft: THE TIME IN BETWEEN, 1846-1931, Section 1 (ENTIRE SECTION) and Chapter 9 (EXCERPT ONLY)

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Here are two more excerpts from the first rewrite/second draft.  As I said, I fleshed out Jonathan and Kimimela a little more and this is the entire first section of the first TIME IN BETWEEN.
I also added more detail to the personalities of Dorothy, Gail, and Linda.  I also have a small excerpt from Chapter 9.  
Finally, the next chapter of the first draft will be posted by Monday evening.  Thanks everyone! :)


THE TIME IN BETWEEN 1846-1931
1 Illinois-IowaTerritory Border United States 1846
Kimimela was wrenched from her sleep.She sat up in bed, pressing her palms against the cool sheets that were spread over the goose feathered mattress as she tried to calm her now rapid breathing and heartrate.She let out a breath and pushed back a few strands of her hair that were matted to her face by the beads of sweat across on her forehead.Kimimela had seen them again, having seen the two young women repeatedly over the passed three months after she had gone to sleep. As Kimimela’s nerves began to ca…

Second Draft/First Rewrite: THE TIME IN BETWEEN, 1846-1931 (Excerpt)

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I had wanted to flesh out the relationship of Jonathan and Kimimela Blake more than I had in the first draft.  Actually, I find the first section in THE TIME IN BETWEEN, 1846-1931 to be rather clumsy as at the time it was written, I was simply just trying to get the general idea out onto paper (as is usually the case with most first drafts).  This is an excerpt from the second draft.  Of course, it will go through another revision, but it's shaping up much better.  Enjoy!


 THE TIME IN BETWEEN 1846-1931
1 Illinois-IowaTerritory Border United States 1846
Kimimela was wrenched out of sleep.She sat up in bed, pressing her palms against the cool sheets that were spread over the goose feathered mattress as she tried to calm her now rapid breathing and heartrate.She pushed back a few strands of her hair were matted to her face by beads of sweat across on her forehead.Kimimela had seen them again, having seen the two young women repeatedly over the passed month since her pregnancy had been dis…